Original Thought, By Brian37

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Original Thought, By Brian37

Original Thought, By Brian37

Is it, is this
What you read now
The mass of energy
In machine language

Is this original
Like love stories
Altruism
And epiphanies

The slingshot new
In defying the odds
Goliath falls
The Mets win

Not at all
An original thought
Just new packaging
Adorning the box

A bow or ribbon
Describes our plight
Utopia triumph
In different language

From early Sandskrit
To internet Kindle
High pitched words
To Dr Sues

From the deep
To every day
The mundane reality
We sex up

No matter the ways
We invent
To sell our plight
Through marketing

New never was
Ideas never are
Alone
Born out of nothing

Life is
The same story
The the journey
From birth to death

Tell it countless times
Details be damned
It is joy and strife
And all between

Life has no labels
No nations
No politics
Yet the same outcome

I am you say
Yes you are
As well as I
Temporary and finite

Original thought
Hardly these prose
Just different arrangement
For you to ponder

"We are a nation of Christians and Muslims, Jews and Hindus -- and nonbelievers."Obama
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I really like this one. I

I really like this one. I don't know exactly why. (Maybe that's a good thing.) I liked the way you used the words and language that you used. Thanks.

Brian37 wrote:

Not at all
An original thought
Just new packaging
Adorning the box

Nice. Really like this stanza. Simple. Clean. But it flows.

Brian37 wrote:

A bow or ribbon
Describes our plight
Utopia triumph
In different language

Excellent!

Minor minor nitpick: "Dr. Seuss" instead of "Dr Sues".

(BTW, did you happen to know the actual pronunciation is 'soyce' like Rolls Royce instead of what people usually say which is 'soose'? Heard that somewhere. )

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Spelllingg is not mi 4

Spelllingg is not mi 4 tay.

Thanks the same, glad you liked it.

"We are a nation of Christians and Muslims, Jews and Hindus -- and nonbelievers."Obama
Check out my poetry here on Rational Responders Like my poetry thread on Facebook under BrianJames Rational Poet also on twitter under Brianrrs37