an atheist poem

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an atheist poem

 

 

What is Heaven

What is Hell

What are thes Christians trying to sell

Dont believe,well neither do I.

You see heaven, i see blank sky.

You havn't sinned, your safe in sound..

you look and see hell,

but i only see ground.


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There are some spelling

There are some spelling mistakes in there. You left out the e in 'haven't'. You also said "your safe in sound" but this is not grammatically correct.  The word your is the possessive form of you, referring to something that a person has, something that belongs to the person in question. I believe you meant to write You're safe in sound. You're is a contraction of you and are.

http://www.wikihow.com/Use-You%27re-and-Your

 

This would still not be correct as the expression is "safe and sound" as in unharmed.

http://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/safe+and+sound

 

Of course you could be talking about someone having a safe, like a vault in a place called sound. As in "Burglars are attempting to break into your safe in sound." Of course if you just said  "Your safe in sound." that would be a sentence fragment because there's no main clause.

 

There are twists of time and space, of vision and reality, which only a dreamer can divine
H.P. Lovecraft


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Nice bit of free verse YoungAtheist.

 

The simple observations are always the best.