Shadows Drink Hemlock, By Brian37

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Shadows Drink Hemlock, By Brian37

The daggers of plumes

From old to new

Allegories and flames

Cave walls give way

 

Give way to truth

Corruption of youth

Teachers and oracles

Authoritarians lose

 

They think they know

Of what they defend

Those ravenous jackals

Like to pretend

 

Like to pretend

The shadows are real

But I have left the cave

And know of the truth

 

Orbiting telliscopes

Kill your oracles

Pulpit soothsayers

Are nothing but liers

 

My childhood window

Gave me such fright

In twilight hours

On cloudy nights

 

Rustling wind

Howled at me

My darkened room

Gave sanctuary

 

Gave sanctuary

To my deepest fear

Invisible things

Creeping near

 

Then one night

I stared them down

The goblins vanished

When my iris expanded

 

Yet, those of years

Still hold fears

Of permanent torture

In fictional flames

 

You don't get it

Cant you see

From Dante we parted

And his absurdity

 

I don't play with Styx

But you still throw rocks

To protect the shadows

On the cave wall

 

You are that kid

I once was

Holding your nukes

Hiding under the covers

 

I have left the cave

And fear not tyrants

Microscopes trump myth

And their vacuous sirens

 

Nothing invisible

Creeps anywhere

Not in the cosmos

Or under your bed

 

Shadows drink hemlock

Brings death to fear

The sunlight of scrutiny

Freed me from the cave

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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You should give me more tips

You should give me more tips on how you write in this more traditional form. This is good and its really funny man because I just wrote a poem this morning about my own childhood escape from belief in god! It's just cool I totally felt what you were saying and I love the allusion to hemlock drinking shadows that's just cool, like some Socrates juxtaposition.

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noafterlifenow wrote:You

noafterlifenow wrote:

You should give me more tips on how you write in this more traditional form. This is good and its really funny man because I just wrote a poem this morning about my own childhood escape from belief in god! It's just cool I totally felt what you were saying and I love the allusion to hemlock drinking shadows that's just cool, like some Socrates juxtaposition.

I am glad you liked this particular poem, but the best advice I can give you is to not take advice from me. I mentioned in your last poem thread why, go read that. I am not an expert nor do I claim to be. For me my writing is hit or miss. That is my approach but that is not everyone's approach.

I've seen plenty of others I'd advise you to pick their brains. I do this for myself, I don't want you to be a clone of me, nor should you be a clone of anyone. Be yourself, read other's, enjoy, and decide for yourself how you want to approach it.

Don't try to copy others, that is not the goal. Soak in everything and be yourself and decide for yourself.

 

My block form style is the one I am comfortable with and drives others nuts. But after seeing an entire Plath book in this same style, I defend the style. Style is still a different subject than word choice or imagery. And I have to admit I drop bombs more than I drop a rose when it comes to word choice and imagery.

Me personally, I don't expect a poem to be written like a sonnet or that it's meter has to be musical and perfect. But again, look around, read everything, don't hinge what you write on what I say or what I like, I am not you.

"We are a nation of Christians and Muslims, Jews and Hindus -- and nonbelievers."Obama
Check out my poetry here on Rational Responders Like my poetry thread on Facebook under BrianJames Rational Poet also on twitter under Brianrrs37