a few poems

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a few poems

i've been posting on this site a long time and i've never tooted my horn along this line, but i guess brian has motivated me a bit, so i'll post a few poems of my own.  i write a lot of poems; they're not about atheism or theism or anything like that, but i suppose they occasionally touch on priapism.  they're purely self-indulgent therapeutuc exercises.  i usually write at least half-drunk or on a very strong nicotine buzz from a hookah, and i end up throwing out at least half as being a pure drunken mess.  here's a few of the filtered gleanings of the last three months or so, with your kind permission:

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 i want to start writing poems again
but i have no ideas
so i'll write without one
this is plucked from my current thoughts
i promise i'll do better

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the earliest morning dew
under my bare feet
in danville
i ran naked
i ran the flame
i ran my youth
now at 27 i've caught it
if i don't fall
into the old rut
of being an asshole
i figure i can hold onto it
for at least another 40 years
i had been drunk
on whiskey
and the tao
now i savor
the ruach
now i savor
the ruach
got it, jack?

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i won't put titles
on poems anymore
titles are an admission
of inadequacy
if you can't say it all
in the first line
you can't say shit
(or maybe that's
all you can say)

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two pretty maids
stretched like felines on a persian rug
drinking tea
one has the cradle of life
turned in my direction
i can't paint
so i write
if i was a brave man
i would talk
if i was a handsome man
they would talk
but i'm content
with my current situation
from the first sight
it usually goes downhill
in any case

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just how does one get to be alone again?
just how does one extradite oneself?
just how does one eject the flaming carcass
of another's heart?
these questions trouble me.

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sitting on a bench
looking for a party i can't find
an unpublished poet
feeling thirty coming on
who once played fierce songs
and chased girls
and caught one occasionally
is now waiting
until enough
time passes
to call his colleagues
without looking like a fool
conventionally married
with chronic foot pain
an unpublished poet
feeling thirty coming on
 

"I asked my father,
I said, 'Father change my name.'
The one I'm using now it's covered up
with fear and filth and cowardice and shame."
--Leonard Cohen


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Thanks for sharing IB

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Enjoyed those!

 

 

 

 

 

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Atheistextremist wrote:

Atheistextremist wrote:

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Enjoyed those!

 

 

 

 

 

jesus christ, man, either you fucked up your post or you're a dadaist genius.

"I asked my father,
I said, 'Father change my name.'
The one I'm using now it's covered up
with fear and filth and cowardice and shame."
--Leonard Cohen


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You must fuck couplets and

You must fuck couplets and meter up the ass

I must have missed the importance of the packaging

Because the content was more important to me

If anything describes it "wow" is fitting

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It's certainly poetry.

It's certainly poetry.

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and now for something completely different......................

Vastet wrote:
It's certainly poetry.
you beat me to it, asshole.


 


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dingusdangus wrote:Vastet

dingusdangus wrote:

Vastet wrote:
It's certainly poetry.
you beat me to it, asshole.


 

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You are a man of my heart

You are a man of my heart hahahahahah! the half drunk and nicotine buzz part is awesome combine that with the fact that you do poetry for yourself makes you the true essence of a poet, like the opposite of an echo.

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I liked the one about the

I liked the one about the women on the rug. I also liked the one about getting to a certain age and wondering where all the time went.

Titled For Your Displeasure, By Brian37

Luck is a fickled thing

It has good moods

And bad

We try to control the dice

As best we can

 

From our livings

To our loves

Yet death

Is our final friend

(END)

 

I titled that in honor of you because you reminded me of a guy who was not only snooty about poetry, but also hated untitled poetry. One day at a meeting we all decided, without telling him, that we would all write poems and not title them, and read them at the next meeting.

I love those two poems I mentioned because "luck" with relationships is just as much as a crap shoot in life, and sometimes we do get lucky, but there is always the other side of the coin.

 

 

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Brian37 wrote:I liked the

Brian37 wrote:

I liked the one about the women on the rug. I also liked the one about getting to a certain age and wondering where all the time went.

Titled For Your Displeasure, By Brian37

Luck is a fickled thing

It has good moods

And bad

We try to control the dice

As best we can

 

From our livings

To our loves

Yet death

Is our final friend

(END)

 

I titled that in honor of you because you reminded me of a guy who was not only snooty about poetry, but also hated untitled poetry. One day at a meeting we all decided, without telling him, that we would all write poems and not title them, and read them at the next meeting.

I love those two poems I mentioned because "luck" with relationships is just as much as a crap shoot in life, and sometimes we do get lucky, but there is always the other side of the coin.

 

 

thanks for the kind words and the insights.  i don't like titling poems because it was almost always something i did as an afterthought, out of a sense of duty.  it was totally artificial.  i went through a period in college, when i was reading a lot in coffeehouses and stuff, where i gave all my poems the title, "i ain't keepin' up with the train times, i'm just tryin' to make a few dimes."  it's a line from an old blues song by bukka white, and honestly it's probably the best title i ever came up with.

"I asked my father,
I said, 'Father change my name.'
The one I'm using now it's covered up
with fear and filth and cowardice and shame."
--Leonard Cohen